www.simplyscripts.net Open in urlscan Pro
209.59.180.91  Public Scan

Form analysis
2 forms found in the DOM

GET https://www.simplyscripts.com/cgi-bin/search.pl

<form method="get" action="https://www.simplyscripts.com/cgi-bin/search.pl">
  <font size="1"> <a href="https://www.simplyscripts.com">Blog Home</a> - <a href="https://www.simplyscripts.com/movie-scripts.html">Produced Movie Script Library</a> - <a href="https://www.simplyscripts.com/tv.html">TV Scripts</a> -
    <a href="https://www.simplyscripts.com/original-unproduced-scripts.html">Unproduced Scripts</a> - <a href="https://www.simplyscripts.com/faq.html#contact">Contact</a> - <a href="https://www.simplyscripts.com/sitemap.html">Site Map</a></font>
  <br>
  <font size="1">ScriptSearch <input name="search" size="50"> <input type="submit" class="button" value="Find It!"></font> <input name="method" value="exact" type="hidden">
</form>

POST Blah.pl?v-login/p-2/

<form action="Blah.pl?v-login/p-2/" method="POST"></form>

Text Content

SimplyScripts Discussion Board
Blog Home - Produced Movie Script Library - TV Scripts - Unproduced Scripts -
Contact - Site Map
ScriptSearch

Welcome, Guest.
It is November 5th, 2024, 2:15am
Please login or register.

Please do read the guidelines that govern behavior on the discussion board. It
will make for a much more pleasant experience for everyone. A word about
SimplyScripts and Censorship. And, if you are confused How does this discussion
board work?


Produced Script Database (Updated!) The Halloween 2024 One Week Challenge
Writers' Choice and Who Wrote What has been posted.

Enjoy!
Short Script of the Day | Featured Script of the Month | Featured Short Scripts
Available for Production
Submit Your Script


How do I get my film's link and banner here? All screenplays on the
simplyscripts.com and simplyscripts.net domain are copyrighted to their
respective authors. All rights reserved. This screenplaymay not be used or
reproduced for any purpose including educational purposes without the expressed
written permission of the author.

Forum Login


Username: Create a new Account Password:     Forgot Password




SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board  ›  Reviews  ›  Script Reviews  ›
 A Topiary by Shane Carruth. Moderators: bert

Users Browsing Forum
No Members and 1 Guests


 Pages: 1

  Author    A Topiary by Shane Carruth.  (currently 25324 views) Scription

Posted: August 5th, 2010, 7:42am

New




Failure is an Option, not a choice.

Location
There. Here. Now.
Posts
46
Posts Per Day
0.01
We all have a little problem here when it comes to screewriting. Some of us are
pro, some of us are just beginning - and in an atmosphere like this, we can all
help each other. I like it about this site.


Now when it comes to A Topiary (http://www.sendspace.com/file/yyez4r - script
link here) we can learn how NOT to do a screenplay.


A Topiary is from Shane Carruth, the creater of Primer.

It's an interesting script, as in, the formatting is incredibly different than
you'd imagine and the dialogue is frustratingly bad.

He'll talk like: "MAN Hi...so - you know... I ... know a... really--
good...place....down by--the sea....lets- go?"

Now that is a sentence where he isnt on the phone.


I couldnt even tell you what the script is about as it involves a car crash, and
then the council deciding to move a road or the city closer to the car-crash and
then the guy finds him these stars in the city and then they turn out to be a
shape

annnnd then meanwhile there are boys who find these disks that make them fly and
then..

And it's also 244 pages long.

The script is long-winded, non-emotional. We dont really finish the first act
until around 64 pages.  



Have a look if you are interested. You could learn a few things about it.

I personally couldnt understand it. It was...It was weird. The scene sets us off
and we're in a car, suddenly it crashes.

Now that's cool. But the rest is just...I don't know.

Oh and that the guy at the start meets these Scientists who also know about
these stars, and that later the Boys make these creatures.

So later in the climax (would I call it a climax? I really couldnt understand
head or tail of it all) the Scientists and the Boys go to war.

was my expression when it started off.

was halfway throughout the script

was at the end.


But have a look. You might understand it.

If YOU understand it, then tell me. Please.

Other than that and the fact the characters have no emotional contact and there
is no achivements in their goals I felt I was just reading a novel.

-Rhys


What Am I Working On?
Currently going back and forth with projects. (--) :


Reason why Rainforests are disappearing is because of all of the useless scripts
Hollywood wants everyday.

Logged Offline




dogglebe

Posted: August 5th, 2010, 7:57am

Guest User




We have a couple of scripts like that, here, don't need to look elsewhere.


Phil

Logged

Reply: 1 - 3

dresseme

Posted: August 6th, 2010, 1:40pm

Guest User




I have faith in Shane Carruth.  Primer was amazing.  There's no telling what
version of the script this is, how much he'll actually even use, etc.

Regardless of the script's quality, Primer has guaranteed a ticket for me to
whatever he makes next.

Logged

Reply: 2 - 3

Colkurtz8

Posted: August 7th, 2010, 5:28am

Old Timer





Location
--> Over There
Posts
1731
Posts Per Day
0.29
Yeah, Primer was fascinating, all credit due to him for getting it made too
considering it was the debut feature of a maths student. I know I needed to
watch it a second and third time. I haven't read "A Topiary" but it doesn't
surprise me that it could leave you at a loss, I had a similar experience with
the screenplay for Darren Aronofsky "Pi", but it made for a very interesting
film nonetheless.

Like Dressel, I�m willing to give Carruth�s next picture a look no matter what
the script is like.


Tricks, Lies and Backhanders (12 pgs) Latest Draft
Rid of Guilt (Alt) (11 pgs) Latest Draft
Pecking Order (19 pgs)
Broadcast (20 pgs)
Blank Canvas (18 pgs)

Full list of scripts and discussion boards Here

Logged Offline

Reply: 3 - 3

 Pages: 1



Locked Board Board Index  ›  Script Reviews  [ previous | next ] Switch to:
NewsQuestions or CommentsSite RedesignScreenwriting ClassSimplyscripts
Collaborative EffortReview My LoglineScript Review ExchangeMy Work In
ProgressContests - Screenwriting and FilmmakingWriting Opportunities and Call
for ScriptsThe 2020 Writers' TournamentThe 2019 Writers' Tournament The 2018
Writers' TournamentThe January Project '21The Business Of ScriptsQueries and
PitchesOptions and ContractsAgents, Managers, and LawyersCopyright
Action/Adventure ScriptsComedy ScriptsDrama ScriptsDramedy ScriptsFamily
ScriptsHorror ScriptsRomantic ComedySci Fi and Fantasy ScriptsSeriesThriller
ScriptsWestern ScriptsShort ScriptsShort Action / Adventure ScriptsShort Comedy
ScriptsShort Drama ScriptsShort Dramedy ScriptsShort HorrorShort Romantic Comedy
ScriptsShort Sci Fi and Fantasy ScriptsShort Family ScriptsShort Thriller
ScriptsShort WesternRadio and Stage Plays    1Q '25 OWC    Halloween 2024 One
Week Challenge    3Q '24 OWC    2Q '24 OWC    1Q '24 OWC    Halloween 2023 One
Week Challenge    September '23 OWC    August '23 OWC    July 2023 OwC    April
'23 OWC    A 'Quickie' Challenge    Halloween 2022 One Week Challenge    Summer
Quickie    April 2022 OWC    One Queue Twenty-Two    The Placeholder 2021
Challenge    December 2021 One Week Challenge    November, 2021 OWC    The
Halloween 2021 One Week Challenge    The September 2021 OWC    The August 2021
OWC    The July, 2021 OWC    The June 2021 Challenge    The May 2021 Challenge 
  The April 2021 Challenge    February, 2021 One Week Challenge    December 2020
One Week Challenge    Halloween 2020 One Week Challenge    September, 2020 One
Week Challenge    June, 2020 One Week Challenge    May, 2020 Challenge    March
Challenge    January 2020 -��One Week Challenge    October, 2019 One Week
Challenge    The August Challenge    April, 2019 One Week Challenge    January
2019 -��One Week Challenge    The Night Gallery 7 Week Challenge    October 2018
One Week Challenge    July 2018 One Week Challenge    May 2018 One Week
Challenge    January 2018 Two Week Challenge    October 2017 One Week Challenge 
  The Quickie Challenge    July 2017 OWC    April 2017 OWC    Scarefest Script
Club    January 2017 One Week Challenge    October 2K16 One Week Challenge   
August 2016 One Week Challenge    April 2016 OWC    January 2016 OWC    October
2015 One Week Challenge    2015 7 Week Challenge     May, 2015 One Week
Challenge    February 2015 One Week Challenge    October 2014 One Week
Challenge    2014 One + 6  Week Challenge    April 2014 One Week Challange   
January 2014 - One Week Challenge    October 2013 One Week Challenge    July
2013 One Week Challenge    March, 2013 1+6WC    End of the World One Week
Challenge    October 2012 One Week Challenge    February 2012 OWC    December,
2011 Urban Legend OWC    October, 2011 One Week Challange    September 2011 One
Week Challenge    June 2011 One Week Challenge    February 2011 One Week
Challenge    October, 2010 One Week Challenge    May 2010 One Week Challenge   
February, 2010 One Week Challenge    October, 2009 One Week Challenge    August
2009 One Week Challenge    April, 2009 One Week Challenge    January, 2009 Two
Week Challenge    October, 2008 One Week Challenge    July 08 One Week
Challenge    February, 2008 One Week Challenge    October '07 One Week
Challenge    Short Sci Fi - January 07 One Week Challenge    July/August 2007
One Week Challenge    Short Comedy - April '07 One Week Challenge    Short
Horror - October 06 One Week ChallengeMovie, Television and DVD ReviewsScript
ReviewsMusic Reviews and Discussion General ChatMovie/Television
RumorBooksPoetryGetting to know you, getting to know all about you...Things you
are looking forMarch Madness 2018    Stephen King - All about the King   
Fiction: There Are Other Worlds than These    Non-Fiction - To Write is Human,
to Edit is Divine    Adaptations - Here's Johnny!    Stephen King Collectors and
Shelfies

 


Forum Rules

You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post polls
You may not post attachments
HTML is on
Blah Code is on
Smilies are on




Powered by E-Blah Platinum 9.71B © 2001-2006